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Always & Almost's avatar

The line 'being known in a way that didn't require being held' is going to live in my head rent free. You named something I didn't have words for.

Mara Ellison's avatar

🙏🏻🫶🏻🌻

AËLA's avatar

The danger

was never the contact.

It was the recognition —

that someone

had found the soft places

you pretended don't exist

and stayed there

long enough

for you to stop pretending.

— AËLA

Mara Ellison's avatar

Indeed, to be seen when you are not pretending feels very dangerous.

August Caroline's avatar

That condensation metaphor was potent

Mara Ellison's avatar

Thank you, glad to hear that 🙏🏻🙂🌻

Aaliya's avatar

Love the subtle tension, passionate piece ♥️

Mara Ellison's avatar

Thank you for reading 🙏🏻🌻

MoTy's avatar

“how far they could go

without breaking the illusion” - as far as necessary. Lovely piece x

Mara Ellison's avatar

Thank you so much MoTy 🙏🏻🫶🏻🌻

Brandi Lynn's avatar

You captured that charged, invisible pull so perfectly—the realization that the most dangerous kind of intimacy isn't physical touch, but the moment two minds completely recognize each other in the quiet ✨

Mara Ellison's avatar

Thanks so much Brandi, you really felt the essence of the poem 🙏🏻🙂

Lyndon Hawk- Mirror and Magic's avatar

Wow! Just wow. I can't say more!

Mara Ellison's avatar

Thank you Lyndon 🙏🏻🙂

greg's avatar

dayum, so slick. a thing of beauty!

Mara Ellison's avatar

Thank you 🙂🙏🏻

Emmie's avatar

Beautiful poem!

Mara Ellison's avatar

Thank you 🫶🏻🙂🙏🏻

Always & Almost's avatar

The inconsequential unison of lustful bodies!

Jon hamp's avatar

So good - but imo hard edit - so that there’s even less to suggest so much more eg:

It happened

as condensation does:

silently,

inevitably

when warmth meets cold

and reveals itself.

Mara Ellison's avatar

Thanks for reading and for your feedback, I appreciate it 🙏🏻🙂

Salubrious Canvas's avatar

Felt all of that, with no touch

Mara Ellison's avatar

That was the assignment 🙂

Mark Decker's avatar

Powerful and sensual. Kind of like 2 binary stars orbiting each other getting closer and sharing their essence. Thanks for sharing.

Mara Ellison's avatar

Yes, exactly! Thanks for reading 🙏🏻🙂

Sam Wolf's avatar

Love it, thank you for sharing, it's like you wrote, how I feel, kinda surreal, to know that there are others, that think, feel and experience in similar ways and not being labeled odd or worst still a little nuts.

Thank you.

Mara Ellison's avatar

Not odd, evolved 😌 Glad it resonated!

The Speechless Poet's avatar

You can feel the tension in this piece from beginning to end. Thank you for sharing!

Mara Ellison's avatar

I’m so glad that translated. Thank you 🙏🏻🙂🌻

Anil Talwar's avatar

It’s vulnerable, slightly dangerous, and beautifully illustrates how being truly seen can feel so much more exposing, and boundless, than merely being touched. Loved the perspective.

Mara Ellison's avatar

Yes, you nailed it. Thanks for reading and sharing your thoughts Anil 🙏🏻🙂

Anil Talwar's avatar

Pleasure, Mara.